Author: ahusted

In answer to your very last question, I think the second one is the better exposure (without being able to see the original, of course). In terms of your other questions (and thanks for those),

1. The tilt of the head is indeed off–a sign that you need to slow down and linger at the schematic stage awhile longer.

2. This is also a good observation. Being aware of that (on your own) is half the battle. The value variations on her forehead, for example, are not as significant as the greater overall unity of the shadow relative to that patch of light to its left. Her hairline on the left side is also quite different–another signal that your schematic (which is 60-70% of the drawing) needed to be more observant and scrupulous.

3. You’re also right about gentler, finer strokes in the face; another signal to slow down. She has a distinctively methodical hatching style that you could learn more from. But yours is not at all dissatisfying in its own right.

4. Your version doesn’t look younger so much as slightly fuller. The proportions in your face are good in and of themselves, but the original is narrower. Once again–something to iron out in the schematic.

5. In terms of smiling, maybe ever so much. But even if this artist copied her own drawing there would be differences of this kind. It takes very little to turn a pensive look into an irritated one (and any number of other mood shifts). You did great.

As you did on the whole drawing. I especially like the way you stuck with her attention to planes–our most important goal. Nicely done!