Author: lweafer

Very fine work, Lily, in every respect. Just a few small notes:

You’ve given her more eye liner than the original but at no expense to planes or anatomy–just as an aside.

Follow O’Neil’s lead when it comes to open contours–there’s one on her left ear lobe (our left) and one along the left side of her neck. The left side of her nose and the center of her upper lip are two more. These not only connect her to the ground (or one plane to another) put add a sense of light bathing the form.

On both cheeks, note how the direction and pattern of the hatching, which is just a bit higher resolution (finer strokes) than yours, expresses the volume of these forms. It’s not just a value (shadow) but changing planes within the value. Yours are flatter as a result.

Great job on the hair but carrying the strokes off the top edge–yours start just a tad below, losing the sense that the head continues outside the frame, as in hers.

Excellent work.